I don't agree with the conclusions of your argument because I don't agree with the premise of your argument and I'm frankly unsure of where to even begin.
Maybe try arguing your points and flushing things out. This reads like someone’s brain storming notes- like it doesn’t even look like a first draft of anything. Sloppy and unconvincing. But thanks to how unoriginal it is I already was convinced that we need to think of a diplomatic means to ending the war.
I don't agree with the conclusions of your argument because I don't agree with the premise of your argument and I'm frankly unsure of where to even begin.
Maybe try arguing your points and flushing things out. This reads like someone’s brain storming notes- like it doesn’t even look like a first draft of anything. Sloppy and unconvincing. But thanks to how unoriginal it is I already was convinced that we need to think of a diplomatic means to ending the war.